Amelia’s Oulipo Podcast
Style: Fictional Narrative
Title: Stepping Over the Threshold
Summary: A woman contemplates leaving an abusive relationship while waiting for her train away in the London Underground.
Citation:
Angry Neighbor by NoiseCollector
Mind the Gap Announcement by Karthics4
London Underground Train Arriving by WIM
April 29th, 2010 at 5:55 pm
This is very creative. You’ve taken on a very serious topic and very successfully adopted the emotions and inner dialogue of the woman in the story. Also, the british accent is brilliant.
April 30th, 2010 at 12:28 pm
- Returning the favor! –
Please don’t ever actually gain a British accent and then get into an abusive relationship; based on this podcast, if you did I think it would break my heart.
On first listening, I thought the podcast, as introspective and thoughtful as it is, would benefit greatly from reworking the narration as a kind of informal poem. Now I basically think it’s great as it is. However, right at the end — the bit about our protagonist finally have hope — could, I think, benefit greatly from a bit of soft music.
I’m not sure just how you did it, but your words convey very well a sense of frightened, conflicted reluctance. The ticking clock in the background added urgency, which made the atmosphere reflect what was going on in the woman’s head.
April 30th, 2010 at 1:48 pm
From the moment you started speaking…I was really very impressed. Your British accent is really good! OK- but really I was ipressed by the emotion and tension your podcast held. There are so many layers that I noticed something different the second and third times I listened to your podcast. I found the sound of the ticking clock to seem as if it was rushing the narrator despite the slow cautious mournful tone of her voice. You did a really great job creating the story